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Average percentage of sodium, saturated fats and added sugar in typical meals consumed in the USA.

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These pie charts illustrate the average ratio of different types of meals (
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, saturated fat, and added
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) in the United Kingdom. It is clear from the graph that the highest percentages for all sorts are
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 and added
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 at dinner and snack times , respectively .
According to
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 what is shown in the breakfast meal, most people consumed 14%, and 16%,
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 , saturated fat, and added
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, respectively. Others consumed more
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 and saturated fat in their food than added
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 during the lunch period.
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, many people prefer to have snacks during the day , which has the highest average ratio by just under half.
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. At dinner time, the average ratio of
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 consumed in food had increased by 43%,
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 added
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 and saturated fat had risen by 23% and 37%, respectively. To summarize, people in the United States consume
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 in their food, which may be detrimental to their health if consumed too much.
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