The pie charts below show the percentage of time working adults spent on different activities in a particular country in 1958 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The pie charts below show the percentage of time working adults spent on different activities in a particular country in 1958 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
This
report illustrates a pie chart depicting how employed individuals in a country spent their
time
across six different activities in the years 1958 and 2008.
Overall
, in the year 1958, the least
time
was spent on travelling to work
while
in 2008, going out with friends and family was the least practised activity. In terms of majority
time
spent, in both 1958 and 2008, adults spent most of their
time
working. The percentage of
time
spent going out with friends and family reduced by thirteen per
cent
from 1958 to six per
cent
in 2008.
Similarly
, the proportion of
time
spent on sleep in 1958 was seven per
cent
more than that of 2008's twenty-five per
cent
.
Change preposition
in.
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The duration spent on work,
however
, increased in 2008 by nine per
cent
from 1958 to forty-two per
cent
.
Likewise
, in 2008, there was an increase of five per
cent
dedicated to hours relaxing at home in 1958 when only eight per
cent
of the
time
was spent on that.
Lastly
, from 1958 to 2008 there was
also
an increase in travel to work from two per
cent
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words time, cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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