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The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the word. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main feature and make comparisons relevant

The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the word. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main feature and make comparisons relevant
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The pie charts highlight data about the proportion of
water
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 usage in six main areas in the world,
such
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 as Europe,
Africa
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, Central and South East
Asia
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 and North and South
America
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.
Overall
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, what stands out from the charts is that by far the most common for Europe is industrial
water
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use
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.
However
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, the vast majority of people from Central
Asia
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, South East
Asia
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 and
Africa
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 prefer to
use
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 agricultural
water
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. In detail, just over half
people
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of people
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use
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 industrial
water
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, closely followed by North
America
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, with 48%.
Although
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,
the
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a
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 small minority of individuals in Central
Asia
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 and
Africa
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 prefer to intake
this
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 kind of
water
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. In terms of agricultural
use
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, Central
Asia
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 comes top of the graph, at 88%.
Moreover
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, the vast majority of the population uses it in
Africa
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 and South East
Asia
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.
Similarly
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, just under three-quarters of
water
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 usage illustrates South
America
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.
To sum up
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, if we look at domestic
use
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, the trend is considerably different.
For instance
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, Central and South-East
Asia
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 are ranked equally, at 7% each. The sector in
Africa
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 highlights approximately one in ten individuals,
while
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 Soth
America
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 is
at
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in
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 first place, with 19% . Regarding Europe, it is the second most popular sector.
Finally
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, just over tenth
humans
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of humans
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use
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this
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water
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 in North
America
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.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, africa, asia, america, use with synonyms.
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