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The chart below shows the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The chart below shows the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
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The given bar chart and table illustrate how changed the
value
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 of export goods between 2015 and 2016.
Overall
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, petroleum
products
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, engineered goods, agricultural
products
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 and textiles witnessed an upward trend,
whereas
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 gems and jewellery
value
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 decreased slightly within the period. Another point that should
also
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 be highlighted is that oil commodities remained in the leading position of
value
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, whilst textiles with the least export
value
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 become equal to agricultural
products
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. Looking at the details, petroleum
products
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 cost about 60
billion
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dollars
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 in 2015 and increased by 3% in the next year to more than 60
billion
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dollars
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.
Besides
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, engineered goods
also
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 showed an increase of 8,5% from less than 60
billion
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dollars
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 in 2015 to approximately 60
billion
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dollars
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 in 2016. As for textiles
value
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, there was a significant growth of 15,24% within the period in question.
Moreover
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, agricultural product
value
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 showed a modest rise by a mere 0,81%. Meanwhile, gems and jewellery costs witnessed a significant fall of 5,18% from more than 40
billion
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dollars
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 to about 40
billion
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dollars
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words value, products, billion, dollars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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