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You have just received a credit card statement from your bank. The statement lists a number of expensive purchases that you are sure you did not make. Write a letter to the bank manager. In the letter: • Introduce yourself. • Explain that you did not buy the items listed. • Say what you would like the bank to do to fix the proble

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My self Surbhi Tyagi and I am your existing customer
since
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last
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the last
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 5 years. Yesterday I
recived
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received
 my credit card statement list from
bank
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the bank
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.
Whereas
 I was busy
in
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with
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 some urgent work and I am sure I
did'nt
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didn't
 redeem my card for
expensive
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an expensive
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 purchase. In the present circumstances, provided list of
purchased
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 it's not real,
I
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and I
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need more discussion on it,
However
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bank
 applying
the
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apply
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extra goods service taxes which is not in my knowledge. I was not aware
about
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this
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these
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 charges.I believe that
,
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 the
bank
 statements
is consider
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 taxes charges and I got
the
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a
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 high bill without
purchsed
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purchased
expansive thinks
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expensive things
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. I would
requesting
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request
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 you to please remove the extra goods service charges in my
bank
 statement, so I can pay my credit card bill
on
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in
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timely
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. Yours, Faithfully Surbhi Tyagi
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