the charts show the percentage of people working in different sectors in town A and B in two years 1960 and 2010

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The pie graphs provide information on the percentage of employees in two towns over a 50-year period of time based on 3 various sections. In town A,

number

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the number

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of employees in Manufacturing and sales decreased significantly by reducing in half in 2010 compared to the 1960 data

whereas

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an opposite trend can be observed in services with an increment of more than 30%.

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, town B shows a similar trend when it comes to

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apply

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manufacturing related

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manufacturing-related

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jobs but the gap is less around

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an 18

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% reduction in 2010 compared to 50 years earlier

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in town A, the gap

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nearly declined

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half in 2010 than before. Even though in 1960, both towns showed a similar change by achieving the largest portion in manufacturing,

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in 2010 the largest portions were

aquired

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acquired

team

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teams

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A & B by services and manufacturing.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

143 words

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the charts show the percentage of people working in different sectors in town A and B in two years 1960 and 2010

School should not force students who do not have natural ability for learning foreign language to study other language at school. To what extent do you agree or disagree

Nowadays young people spend too much of their free time in shopping malls. Some people fear that this may have negative effects on young people and the society they live in. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people say that competitive sports have advantages for people from different groups and countries, while others believe that competitive sports only create problems between people. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

97.In many countries, the amount of waste produced by households and industries is increasing at an alarming rate. What are the main causes of this situation, and what measures could be taken to tackle the problem?