the charts show the percentage of people working in different sectors in town A and B in two years 1960 and 2010

the charts show the percentage of people working in different sectors in town A and B in two years 1960 and 2010
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The pie graphs provide information on the percentage of employees in two towns over a 50-year period of time based on 3 various sections. In town A,
number
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of employees in Manufacturing and sales decreased significantly by reducing in half in 2010 compared to the 1960 data
whereas
an opposite trend can be observed in services with an increment of more than 30%.
In contrast
, town B shows a similar trend when it comes to
the
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manufacturing related
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manufacturing-related
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jobs but the gap is less around
18
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an 18
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% reduction in 2010 compared to 50 years earlier
while
in town A, the gap
is
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nearly declined
in
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half in 2010 than before. Even though in 1960, both towns showed a similar change by achieving the largest portion in manufacturing,
but
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in 2010 the largest portions were
aquired
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acquired
by
team
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A & B by services and manufacturing.
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