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the percentage of Australian men and women in different age group who did regular physical activity in 2010

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The chart provides data on, how much Australian people tended to do workouts in 2010 based on their sexuality and
age
 limits.
Overall
, there was a small fluctuation in the proportion of exercises among different
age
 groups.
In contrast
, from 35 to 44 figured a large number ranges between females and males.
Moreover
, females used to do physical activities more than males in Australia in 2010.
According to
 the bar graph, the proportions of physical activity stood at the highest point between 45 to 54 old women and at the
age
 limit 65 and over it hit the lowest level. These were respectively 53.3% and 47.1%. Except 15 to 24 females had been doing more exercises than males. In
this
age
 limit percentages were 52.8% in men and 47.7% in their opposite sexes. From 35 to 40 the contrast between the two sexuality was 13% and it increased significantly.
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