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The graph compares employment rates in three sectors in economy, in the UK, 2000-2010

The graph compares employment rates in three sectors in economy, in the UK, 2000-2010
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is elucidate
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 the
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 of three divided economy parts(public, private, and self-employed) in the UK in terms of the employment rates from 2000 to 2010.
Overall
, the
propotion
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proportion
 of
the
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labors
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labours
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 who were employed by
private
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a private
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company
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companies
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 was the biggest part
in
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 the beginning of the period given, but the figure keep declined, resulting to become the smallest percentage
in
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 the end of the period.
By contrast
, the
propotions
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proportions
proportion
 of the employment rate in
public
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the public
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 and
self-employed
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the self-employed
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department
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departments
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 both had an up trend. In 2000, it is crystal clear the percentage of the
stuff
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staff
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 who worked for
private
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the private
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 economy was
the
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 zenith around 48%. But it had a rapidly cut to about 41% in 2002. After a short remained
stablen
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stable
stables
 to 2003, the figure kept dramatically
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 to just lower than 30% in 2007,
leveled
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 off
to
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in
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 2008, and had another
noticeably
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 slide to nearly 20% in 2010, the bottom in
this
 period.
By contrast
, the ratio of
the
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employment in private firms and self-employed both had
the
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an
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 upward trend. The
employement
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employment
unemployment
 rate came from self-employed
enterprice
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enterprise
 was the lowest
secrtor
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sector
 in 2000, roughly 18%. The percentage increased
steadly
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steadily
steady
 to 20% in 2002, after a tedious reduction to 18% in 2003, kept
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 significantly to 30% in 2010.
Simarilly
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Similarily
, the number of
public
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the public
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department
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departments
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 had the same ceiling trend: the figure stood at about 38% in 2000, sharply climbed to
the
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49% in 2005, and after a
short term
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short-term
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 decrease in 2006, recover to
steady
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a steady
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 soar to over 50% in 2010.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "by contrast".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 86%.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "compares" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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