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the charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

the charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie charts illustrate the
percentage
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 of
water
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 used for three different aims
such
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 as industrial, agriculture and domestic use in six
areas
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 of the world.
Overall
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, we can see that the highest
percentage
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 of using
water
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 for
agriculture
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 purposes is in Central
Asia
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.
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,
water
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usage
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 in the industrial section has the lowest
percentage
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 in that area.
Europe
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 has the highest
usage
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 of
water
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 in that section. And for domestic aims, South
America
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 is in the first rank.
Water
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usage
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 for agriculture goal has
the
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a
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 significant
percentage
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 in all
areas
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. Among all
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areas
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,areas
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 the
percentage
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 of
usage
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water
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 for Central
Asia
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, Africa and Southeast
Asia
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 is more than 80%. After those
areas
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, South
America
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 has the fourth rank with 71% consumption of
water
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.
By comparison
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 with two other
areas
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,
Europe
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 and North
America
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, the consumption of
water
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 is virtually half of South
America
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, 32% and 37% respectively. The other two
water
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usage
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 purposes are domestic and industrial. About half of the
water
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 consumption for
Europe
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 and North
America
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 is for industrial, but for Southeast
Asia
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 and South
America
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 it is about
one tenth
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one-tenth
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 and for others is under 10%.
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, for domestic goals, Southeast
Asia
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, Central
Asia
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 and Africa use the least
water
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, 7%, 7% and 9% respectively.
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, almost 15% of
water
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 for domestic purposes is used by
Europe
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 and North
America
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. And South
America
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 has the first rank in
water
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usage
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 with 19%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, water, areas, asia, usage, europe, america with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • water consumption
  • agricultural, industrial, domestic
  • usage patterns
  • developed vs developing regions
  • irrigation systems
  • climate factors
  • percentage breakdown
  • water management
  • sustainability
  • residential water use
  • efficiency
  • charts comparison
  • water-intensive
  • water scarcity
  • resource allocation
  • desalination
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