The chart below shows the proportion of male and female students studying six art-related subjects at a UK university in 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The chart below shows the proportion of male and female students studying six art-related subjects at a UK university in 2011.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.
This
bar chart gives information about
percentage
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the percentage
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of
men
ane
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and
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women in 6 different
coruses
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courses
in arts
at
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in
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United
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the United
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Kingdom in 2011.
Overall
, both males and females had
a high rates
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high rates
a high rate
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in linguistics and English language and literature,
while
they have lower rates in philosophy and history
archeology
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archaeology
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. In
linguistcs
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linguistics
female
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females
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are
highly
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more highly
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rating
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rated
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than
men
by around 240%,
while
men
have a good rate with 180%.
However
,
woman
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women
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are still high in Philosophy by 150%
surpass
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surpassing
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men
by around 100%.
Also
, both have
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a rate
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rate
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rates
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nearly
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of nearly
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250% and the woman still above the
men
overtake 25%.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words men with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportion
  • art-related subjects
  • gender distribution
  • predominate
  • significant
  • gender imbalances
  • percentages
  • comparison
  • balanced distribution
  • data
  • figures
  • trends
  • popular
  • least popular
  • subject choices
  • analyze
  • overview
  • summarize
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