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the chart below shows the value of one country export in various categories during 2015 and 2016. the table shows the percentage change in value og export in 2016

the chart below shows the value of one country export in various categories during 2015 and 2016. the table shows the percentage change in value og export in 2016
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The bar chart depicts the income of a particular nation from five different exports from 2015 to 2016
while
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 the table gives information about the
percentage
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 change in values of these commodities in the same period of time. From the
overall
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 perspective, petroleum products contributed the most significant income for the nation and engineering goods has the highest values in two different years.
It is clear that
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 in 2015 and 2016 petroleum products became the most productive export activities consisting of $60
billion
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 and $62
billion
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, respectively.
Then
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, it was followed by engineered goods which contributed $55
billion
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 and $60
billion
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 in the two different years.
According to
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 the given pictures, textiles, interestingly, were the highest in
percentage
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 at 15,24%.
Following
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this
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 was engineered goods at 8,5%.
However
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,
although
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 petroleum became the highest, it just increased by 3% in value
percentage
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.
Moreover
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, agricultural products had the least
percentage
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 at 0,81%.
In contrast
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, germs and jewellery had opposite directions with 5,15%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, billion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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