The table shows the proportion of women in the labor force and women in management in five countries

The table shows the proportion of women in the labor force and women in management in five countries
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The table indicates the percentage of women working in the labour force and management in five different countries. The number of working women in that area varies from less than 10% to almost 50%. If we look at the proportion in
Australia
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, more than 40% of female works in the labour force and management.
However
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, by average calculation,
Australia
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is not the top contributor. The United
States
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average amount of percentage is slightly higher than
Australia
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's with 46% and 43%. Even though the United States won by an average of points, Japan breaks the record for women labours with nearly 50%.
On the other hand
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, inversely proportional to Japan, Egypt shows no more than 20%. As gender equality seems to be more advocated these days, females have started to make their way to corporate leadership. The data shows that
Australia
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and the United States have the same proportion and are considered high-ranking compared to others. Japan took second place with 12%.
In contrast
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, Sri Lanka provides the lowest number by only 9%.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words australia with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Labor force
  • Management
  • Proportion
  • Gender gap
  • Leadership roles
  • Workforce participation
  • Variance
  • Economic factors
  • Cultural influences
  • Legal framework
  • Education
  • Maternity leave
  • Workplace discrimination
  • Career progression
  • Gender equality
  • Organizational policies
  • Case study
  • Representation
  • Strategies
  • Disparities
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