The table below shows the percentage participation of women in senior management in three companies between 1975 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the percentage participation of women in senior management in three companies between 1975 and 2015.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table depicts the
percentage
of
women
who participated in senior management positions in three
companies
over 40
years
from 1975 to 2015.
Overall
, it is apparent that the number of
women
working
as
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at
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a
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senior manager level in Eldan and Bamforth
LTD
companies
is increasing throughout the given time.
In contrast
, the Finsbury
LTD
percentage
was changing every
five
years
. In the year 1975 more
women
were in senior positions at Finsbury
Ltd
than the other two
companies
amounting to 16%, but the
percentage
drop
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dropped
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of
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to
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14% after
five
years
, followed by a rise of 1%
five
years
later. In 1990,
women
’s
percentage
was
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increased by 7% but again the rate drop back to 20% in 2000. After 15
years
, 26% of top posts were filled by
women
.
Furthermore
, Eldan and Bamforth are two
companies
who
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that
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display a
steady
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steadily
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increasing trend from the beginning of the period till 2015. There was no change
saw
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seen
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in Eldan
LTD
data in the first
five
years
it was accounting for 3%.
Then
after
five
years
, the
percentage
inclined more than threefold and consistently rose in the final year,
who
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which
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made up the highest
percentage
of 64%
that
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which
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was far more as compared to other
companies
.
Similarly
, Bamforth
LTD
got 9% in the starting
years
and gradually increased with an average of 2% in each subsequent period until 2000.
However
, in 2015 the proportion rose by 29% and
recorded
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was recorded
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as 46%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, women, companies, years, ltd, five with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 6 times.
Vocabulary: The word "drop" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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