Women and men are commonly seen as having different strengths and weaknesses.Is it right to exclude males or females from certain profession because of their gender.

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Women
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and
men
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are generally look
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as having dissimilar forces and
weak
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being weak

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.It seems to me that
women
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are weak toward
men
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for working,and I will explain why in
this
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essay.
Firstly
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, sometimes females and males are
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the exception
an exception
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the exception
an exception

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exception
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to
work
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, and It has related
themselves
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and their job circumstances.Since the
women
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can not lift heavy things easily and they have weak
from
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apply

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physically toward males,
and
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apply

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the
men
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are consistent and
strongly
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strong

The word strongly doesn’t seem to fit this context. Consider replacing it with a different one.

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,and they are endurable against
lift
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lifting

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heavy things.
For example
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,a woman better
work
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in
the
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a

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hospital as a nurse
toward
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than

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a man
where
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who

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he
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apply

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works in
a mines
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mines
a mine

The indefinite article a may not be required with the plural noun mines in this sentence. Consider removing the article, or changing the noun to singular.

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.A second factor,
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is the
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that
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is the

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that
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the
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that
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female and
male
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males

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are vulnerable in workplaces
,
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apply

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and must
excluded
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exclude
be excluded

The verb excluded after the modal verb must does not appear to be in the correct form. Consider changing the verb form.

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for them.Because
,
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apply

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there are
dangerous
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dangers

The word dangerous doesn’t seem to fit this context. Consider replacing it with a different one.

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In some jobs
such
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as sense of smell and
skinny
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being skinny

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.
For instance
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, It is not vital for a woman to
work
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in a
work
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environment contaminated with dangerous substances
such
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as uranium.
This
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leads us
on
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to

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the final,and perhaps most significant drawback to
women
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is acrophobia.
That is
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,
the
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apply

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women
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more
scare
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scared

The word scare doesn’t seem to fit this context. Consider replacing it with a different one.

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than
mens
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men

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from highness,they are not necessary to
work
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at an elevation.
Such
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as
,
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apply

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washing
window
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windows

It seems that window may not agree in number with other words in this phrase.

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at
an
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a

The article an may be incorrect. Consider changing it to agree with the beginning sound of the following word height.

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height tower. It is true that there are
female
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females

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and
male
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males

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who can
work
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common
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in common

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,and they are equally powerful.As
also
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,there is no exception for them in anything.
Dispite
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Despite

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this
Linking Words

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,It seems that
for
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apply

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all females and all males
where
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who

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they
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apply

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had worked in
improper
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the improper

The noun phrase improper workplace seems to be missing a determiner before it. Consider adding an article.

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workplace
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workplaces

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,and without to achieve any
informations
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pieces of information

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from
environment
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the environment

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,now
they
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apply

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suffer
fram
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from

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unhealthy
body
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bodies

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.
To conclude
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Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

,
the
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apply

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women
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It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

and
men
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It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

do not have to
work
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abnormal
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in abnormal

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conditions or lift heavy things,or
work
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at heights.It has related themselves
,
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apply

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since there are
female
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females

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and
male
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males

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who like
do
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to do

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that.

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Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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