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The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world.

The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world.
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A glance at the pie charts reveals information about the consumption of
water
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 in the industrial, agricultural and domestic fields in six areas in the world( North
America
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, South
America
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,
Europe
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,
Africa
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, Central
Asia
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, and South East
Asia
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).
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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Europe
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 has the most
use
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 of
water
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 in the industrial
section
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(53%),
whereas
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 Central
Asia
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 has the least
use
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 in
this
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 field(5%), and the most
water
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that is
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 used there is in agriculture(88%).
According to
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 the pie charts, after
Europe
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, North
America
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 has the most
use
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 of
water
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 in the industrial
section
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 with 48%. South East
Asia
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, South
America
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,
Africa
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, and Central
Asia
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 have less share in using of
water
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 in the industry with 12%, 10%, 7%, and 5% respectively. South East
Asia
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, Central
Asia
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,
Africa
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, and South
America
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 utilize over 70% of their
water
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 source in agriculture(71%, 88%, 84% and 71% in order).
On the contrary
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, North
America
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 only
use
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 39%, and
Europe
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use
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 32% in
this
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 field. The least usage of
water
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 sources in the domestic
section
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 in comparison with the industrial and agricultural
section
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 is in North
America
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(13%),
Europe
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(15%), South East
Asia
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(7%),
while
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 domestic
use
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 of
water
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 in South
America
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 is 13%, in
Africa
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 is 9%, and in Central
Asia
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 is 7%.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, america, europe, africa, asia, use, section with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption
  • irrigation
  • domestic
  • industrial
  • regional disparity
  • economic structure
  • sustainable management
  • water-scarce
  • population density
  • urbanization
  • data trends
  • resource allocation
  • percentage distribution
  • extremes
  • variations
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