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You have returned from your vacation staying at a bed and breakfast. When you checked your bank account,you realised you have been charged twice for the deposit. Thank the host for your stay. Explain the double deposit charge situation. Ask the host for a refund.

#vacation #breakfast #bank #account #deposit #host #charge #situation #refund
Dear sir, My name is
zarna
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Zarina
Zara
 patel. I am writing
this
 letter to request for
refund
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a refund
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the
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of the
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 amount of my stay at
bed
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the bed
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 and breakfast, which has been debited twice from my account. I am a
full time
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full-time
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 worker at
multinational
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a multinational
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 company.
However
,to recuperate
myself
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apply
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I went to Goa and Stayed in
bed
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a bed
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 and breakfast hotel. Because of all the hospitality you provided ,the trip has become memorable for me. Thank you so much for every facility you provided during my stay. Despite I made
payment
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a payment
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 on arrival through Paytm,the amount has been deducted on
second
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the second
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 day
my
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of my
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 stay. I was not aware of
this
 situation,
untill
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until
 I paid my credit bill and
seen
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 my passbook entries. Since
,
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i
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I
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 was aware of the incident, I immediately called the manager to let them
aware
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about
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of
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 the situation. They told me that if the host of the bed and breakfast will asses the issue and will give permission,
then
 only they will be able to refund my amount. Kindly look
in to
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 the matter urgently. 4536787901 is my account of Axis
bank
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Bank
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 and [email protected] is my mail address,in case u need any information regarding the matter
then
 u can contact me . Yours sincerely, Zarna Dobariya
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