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The chart below gives information about the household percentage of spending on essential goods in China for the years 1995 and 2011.

The chart below gives information about the household percentage of spending on essential goods in China for the years 1995 and 2011.
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The line chart
illustrate
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 predictions
of
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 employment in
USA
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the USA
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 and shows how much increased and decreased through the years in the future.
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, there are three trends of employment; manufacturing, services and agriculture. The predictions are for 2025 and some of the trends increase romantically but some stay sable. On the first hand, agriculture start in 1975 with 10 million,
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 in 1979 hit a peak dramatically with a prediction of 90
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millions
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 in 2025,
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, agriculture started with 80
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millions
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 and plunged drastically in 2025 with 10
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millions
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million
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.
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, manufacturing started with 10
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millions
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million
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 and in 1980 increased to 40
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millions
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million
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,
although
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 the predictions
says
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 it going to fall again in 2025

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words millions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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