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The line graph below shows the oil production and consumption in China between 1982 and 2006.

The line graph below shows the oil production and consumption in China between 1982 and 2006.
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The line chart illustrates how much
oil
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 was produced and consumed in China from 1982 to 2006.
Overall
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, it can be seen that there was an upward trend in both the
production
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 and consumption of
oil
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 during the given
period
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.
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,
oil
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 consumption climbed significantly faster compared to its
production
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 over 24 years. At the beginning of the
period
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, the figures for both
oil
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production
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 and consumption were nearly equal, at around 2
million
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 barrels per day. After 8 years, the amount of
oil
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 produced rose significantly by 1
million
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 and remained unchanged until 1994. Meanwhile, that
oil
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 consumed witnessed stability until 1990, after which it climbed remarkably to 3
million
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 in 1994. In the second half of the
period
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, the figure for
oil
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production
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 increased slightly to 3.5
million
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 barrels per day.
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, the amount of
oil
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 consumed grew steadily by 1
million
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 every 4 years
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 and
finally
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 reached a peak of 6
million
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at the end
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 of the
period
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words oil, production, period, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "climbed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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