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Many people think that job satisfaction is important in work. Do you think young people these days should be sure of job satisfaction before taking a new job or should they put salary first?

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Job
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satisfaction
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 is vital for many
people
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in
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work
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. From my point of view, young
people
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nowaday
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nowadays
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 should be ensure of
job
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satisfaction
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 rather than put salary first.
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 essay will demonstrate the reasons of
job
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satisfaction
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 is more important than salary.
Firstly
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, young
folks
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tends
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 to change
job
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 more
fruequently
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frequently
 than old
folks
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.
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 is because young employees are not good at controlling their
emotion
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emotions
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.
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, if their boss
ask
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 young
staffs
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staff
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 to finish
the
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 task in a short time, and
that is
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 not part of their
job
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, young
staffs
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staff
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 might feel unhappy
to do
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doing
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 the task. So
that
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apply
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,
job
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satisfaction
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 is important for young
staffs
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staff
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.
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, young employees tend to finish
work
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 and leave the company on time.
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 is because young
folks
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 prefer to go home and take
rest
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a rest
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, or they have other plans with their family or friends.
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, if their boss gives them a task when it is about
work
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 hour
is finish
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, young
folks
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 would feel
extremly
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extremely
 not happy with
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 situation, and
this
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 will
casue
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cause
 them to quit the
job
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.
Therefore
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,
job
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satisfaction
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 is vital for young
folks
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.
To sum up
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, young
people
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 like
finish
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work
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 on time and just
work
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the
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on the
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 tasks which are part of their
job
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.
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This
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These
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 two reasons
of
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for
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job
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satisfaction
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 are important for young
people
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.
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