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Shares of expenditures for five major categories in the United States, Canada, the United Kingdom, and Japan in the year 2009

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The bar chart depicts consumers in the United States, Canada, the United Kingdom, and Japan assigned different percentages of total spending to categories
such
 as food, housing, and transportation.
Overall
, consumers spent more
money
 on housing than on the other four categories shown. In these countries,
however
, the percentage of citizens spending on health care was the lowest. The chart shows that the percentage of Americans allocating
money
 to the 'housing' sector is around 26%, which is 12% and 9% higher than the percentages for food and transportation, respectively. meanwhile, Japan spent the least on food (23%), followed by 14% of Americans, 15% of Canadians, and only 20% of Britons. The proportions of purchasers in the United States and Canada who spent
money
 on transportation were higher than the proportions in the other countries, at around 17% and 20%. Healthcare and clothing,
on the other hand
, were the two least expensive categories. There were no significant differences in the proportions of citizens in these countries who spent
money
 on clothing, which ranged from 4% to 6%.
However
, the rate of
health-care
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healthcare
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 expenditure in the United States was 7%,
while
Canada
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Canadian
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 and
Japan
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Japanese
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 citizens spent the same, at 4%.
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