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The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010.

The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010.
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The pies give information about the percentages of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other
languages
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in addition
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 to English in 2000 and 2010. It is important to note that Germany is the one
language
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 which did not change in both years. Spanish which stood at 30% in 2000 was the common
language
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 that students spoke in 2000. In comparison with French, Other
languages
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 were half of the Spanish rate of 15%.
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, No other
language
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 was one-fifth of the chart in 2000
in contrast
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 with German and Two other
languages
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 which were 10% of the pie chart in the same year. In 2010, the only
language
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 which did not change was German with 10% in compare with Spanish, Another
language
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 and Two other
languages
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 which increased by 5%.
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, No other
languages
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 experienced a dramatic fall from 20% to 10%
also
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 in 2010 French, German and No other
languages
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 stood at the same rate.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportions
  • British students
  • university
  • speaking other languages
  • language proficiency
  • overall trends
  • comparison
  • 2000
  • 2010
  • chart
  • data
  • percentage
  • significant
  • increase
  • decrease
  • noteworthy
  • comparative analysis
  • improvement
  • decline
  • conclusion
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