The line chart shows trends in terms of employment in the USA in millions and predictions for the future.

The line chart shows trends in terms of employment in the USA in millions and predictions for the future.
The chart below
representes
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represents
the data on the trends of professions in the United States from 1975 to 2025. Looking from an
overall
perspective, it is evident that Services will be the most progressive employment part in the United States.
However
, prediction shows that the
Agriculture
sector
will be the least employed in the future.
Moreover
, it can be clearly seen that Manufactures
sector
was not been employed in the beginning and will not be employed in the future.
To begin
with, in 1975 the
Agriculture
sector
showed the highest figures (80
million
).
In contrast
, Services and Manufactures illustrated the lowest figures and were in the same level of employment (9
million
). In the 1977 numbers of
Agriculture
sector
significantly dropped (43
million
) .
Conversely
, in the same year
number
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a number
the number
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of Services and Manufactures slightly started to grow.
Then
, in 1980 all three sectors crossed at the same point ( 40
million
). After,
this
year figures for the Service
sector
started considerably increasing and should achieve 90
million
workers in 2025. Despite that, the numbers
of
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in
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the
Agriculture
sector
continued to fall and in 2025 should reach 10
million
employees . The same situation is with the Manufacturing
sector
.   In conclusion, the service
sector
will be the most popular
between
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among
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employees in the future
to compare
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compared
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with the
agriculture
and
manufacture
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manufacturing
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sectors.
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