This line chart shows trends in terms of employment i the USA in millions and predictions for the future.

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line chart we can see trends of employment in different things in the United States of America throughout the years in millions.

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, we can see that during the

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15 years, between the years 1975 and

2025

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there has been some increment in the area of services and some decreasement in manufacturing and agriculture.

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the services were steady between 10 and 15 million but in 1979

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went up sharply to end in 90. In the area of

manufacturing

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it was similar to services at

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in 1979 it went up and got to 40

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in 1980 it dropped to 10 million in 2025.

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but not least, the one that had the most changes

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was agriculture. It started in 1975 with 80 million just to

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to 50 in 1979, to finish up with 10 in 2025.

patriciareyesfiguero

Apr 25, 2023

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