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The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English in 2000 and 2010.

The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English in 2000 and 2010.
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The bar charts illustrate the
percentage
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 of British pupils at a university in England who are able to speak other
languages
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in addition
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 to English in 2000 and 2010.
Overall
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, it can be seen that apart from English most of the
students
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 can speak Spanish only
whereas
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 few of them can speak two other
languages
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.
To begin
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, in 2000 most
of
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British
students
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 are able to speak Spanish only and one-fifths of the
students
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 cannot speak other
languages
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.
However
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, the same
percentage
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 of 15% of British
students
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 can speak French only and another language.
Also
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, one-ten of the
students
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 can speak two other
languages
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 and German only.
Furthermore
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, in 2010 the highest
percentage
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 of the
students
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 are able to speak Spanish only which shows a slight increase and 20% of the
students
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 can speak another language. Meanwhile, the same
percentage
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 of the
students
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 of 10% can speak no other language, french only and German only which is the lowest number compared to others.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, languages, students with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportions
  • British students
  • university
  • speaking other languages
  • language proficiency
  • overall trends
  • comparison
  • 2000
  • 2010
  • chart
  • data
  • percentage
  • significant
  • increase
  • decrease
  • noteworthy
  • comparative analysis
  • improvement
  • decline
  • conclusion
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