Most high-level positions in companies are filled by men even though the workforce in many developed countries is more than 50persent female. Companies should be required to allocate a certain percentage of these positions to women. To what extend do you agree?
Most high-level positions in enterprises are held by men,
although
the workforce in many developed countries is over 50 per cent female. It is argued that work providers should give a higher number of important job roles to females. This
essay totally agrees with that statement. I believe that women can handle better high levels of stress and the decision they made
is beneficial to the population because they have higher compassionate empathy compared to men. Wrong verb form
make
To begin
with, women are used to multitasking as a consequence
of having to do more tasks such
as cleaning, cooking, raising a child, helping the parents e
so more. Correct your spelling
and
On the other hand
, men only provide money and because of the mentality here in Albania, a major part of them don't
help with other duties. For example
, one day my uncle was asked to take care of his child just for a few hours, when her wife arrived found
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apply
him
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he
irritated
because he didn'Add a missing verb
was irritated
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have time to take care of himself and the house was so chaotic. Now he understands how great women are at managing time and handling stress. Furthermore
, important roles require also
compassionate empathy, the ability to not only understand another's feelings but also
to feel compelled to help them can make a difference. For instance
, Nestlé company isn't
all about giving, In 2019, Nestlé placed among the top 20 wealthiest companies in the world with a net profit of over $10 billion, according to
MarketWatch. Despite the company's huge earnings, some of the powers at be at Nestlé didn't
feel all that compelled to give to charity. I am confident in saying that if a woman was in charge she would donate. To sum up
, work providers should give a higher number of important job roles to females, because they can manage better stress and have higher empathy, resulting in better decisions and hope for the population in need.Submitted by mustaarjola9 on
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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.
A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).
Stick to this essay structure:
- Paragraph 1 - Introduction
- Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
- Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
- Paragraph 4 - Conclusion