The chart shows the percentage of women and men in one Asian country who passed when they took their driving test between 1980 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart shows the percentage of women and men in one Asian country who passed when they took their driving test between 1980 and 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
This
chart demonstrates the percentage of women and men who passed when they took their driver's license test in an Asian country from 1980 to 2010.
Overall
, women have been more successful on driving test than men and the differences between them
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unchanged over the period.
Firstly
, male people rates
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increased by approximately 10% between 1980 to 1990. After that,
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situation was constant for the next 10 years.
This
steady rise only lasted until 2000.
Thus
, the number of female candidates remains unchanged
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nearly half of them
Secondly
, female people started with a big portion nearly 50%. There
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a
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little growth in the next 10 years but the rates reach a peak
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the graph in 2000. The rate is rapidly decreasing, reaching nearly 70% at the top of the table. After
such
rapid growth, rates are beginning to fall for the first time in 2010, but only by about 4-5%.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Percentage
  • Pass rate
  • Driving test
  • Trend
  • Increase
  • Decrease
  • Milestone
  • Comparison
  • Significant difference
  • Broad social changes
  • Policy changes
  • Surpass
  • Reflect
  • Implications
  • Disparity
  • Overall trends
  • Summarize
  • Statistical data
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