The bar chart below shows the percentage of australian men and women in different age groups who did regular Physical activity in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main Features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the percentage of australian men and women in different age groups who did regular Physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main Features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart gives per cent information about both Australian genders in the diversity of age categories who did exercise regularly in 2010.
Overall
, it can be seen that among
youngest
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group
boy
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boys
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spent more time than girls
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ladies
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fellows. Another interesting point is that the percentage was almost alike in
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senility. In the adolescent gang (15 to 24)
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daughters
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near as active as boys with 47.7 % and 52.8 %respectively.
Conversely
, in the second band at the life of 25 to 34 women beat men by reaching 48.9 %
while
men stayed just over 40 per cent.
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this
, 35 to 44 years old
females's
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rate continued to
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50% but
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males'
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ratio decreased to 43.1 and the high percentage among ladies was 53.3 in the
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handle
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of (45 to 54). The proportion of being active did not Change in the Middle _aged swarm with 53% and 45.1 for women and men in turn
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whereas
in the senility set (65 and over) the bonus
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almost alike.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Percentage
  • Australian men
  • Australian women
  • Age groups
  • Regular physical activity
  • Participated
  • Increased
  • Decreased
  • Proportion
  • Physically active
  • Gender difference
  • Engaged
  • Exercise
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