The bar chart below shows the percentage of australian men and women in different age groups who did regular Physical activity in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main Features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart gives per cent information about both Australian genders in the diversity of age categories who did exercise regularly in 2010.
Overall
, it can be seen that among youngest
group Correct article usage
the youngest
boy
spent more time than girls Fix the agreement mistake
boys
while
in the period of adultness
ladies Replace the word
adulthood
defeat
fellows. Another interesting point is that the percentage was almost alike in Replace the word
defeated
the
senility.
In the adolescent gang (15 to 24) Correct article usage
apply
doughters
were Correct your spelling
daughters
no where
near as active as boys with 47.7 % and 52.8 %respectively. Join the words
nowhere
Conversely
, in the second band at the life of 25 to 34 women beat men by reaching 48.9 % while
men stayed just over 40 per cent. Following
this
, 35 to 44 years old females's
rate continued to Remove the s
females'
over
50% but Add a missing verb
be over
unfortunately
Add a comma
,unfortunately
males'
ratio decreased to 43.1 and the high percentage among ladies was 53.3 in the Change noun form
males
hundle
of (45 to 54). The proportion of being active did not Change in the Middle _aged swarm with 53% and 45.1 for women and men in turn Correct your spelling
handle
bundle
wheras
in the senility set (65 and over) the bonus Correct your spelling
whereas
were
almost alike.Change the verb form
was
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