The bar chart below shows the percentage of australian men and women in different age groups who did regular Physical activity in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main Features, and make comparisons where relevant.

IELTS Writing Task Chart for The bar chart below shows the percentage of australian men and women in different age groups who did regular Physical activity in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main Features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The bar chart gives per cent information about both Australian genders in the diversity of age categories who did exercise regularly in 2010.

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, it can be seen that among

youngest

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the youngest

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group

boy

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boys

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spent more time than girls

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in the period of

adultness

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ladies

defeat

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fellows. Another interesting point is that the percentage was almost alike in

the

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senility. In the adolescent gang (15 to 24)

doughters

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daughters

were

no where

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near as active as boys with 47.7 % and 52.8 %respectively.

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, in the second band at the life of 25 to 34 women beat men by reaching 48.9 %

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men stayed just over 40 per cent.

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this

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, 35 to 44 years old

females's

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rate continued to

over

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50% but

unfortunately

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males'

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ratio decreased to 43.1 and the high percentage among ladies was 53.3 in the

hundle

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handle

bundle

of (45 to 54). The proportion of being active did not Change in the Middle _aged swarm with 53% and 45.1 for women and men in turn

wheras

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whereas

in the senility set (65 and over) the bonus

were

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almost alike.

mehrdad.salahi2003Tue May 02 2023

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".

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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.

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5
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meeting the goal of 7 or more
0
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
14
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

180 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

Percentage
Australian men
Australian women
Age groups
Regular physical activity
Participated
Increased
Decreased
Proportion
Physically active
Gender difference
Engaged
Exercise

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The bar chart below shows the percentage of australian men and women in different age groups who did regular Physical activity in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main Features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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