the bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The figure illustrates the
percentage
of male and female people of
Australia in six age Change preposition
in
groups
from 15 to over 65 years old who did regular workout
in 2010.
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workouts
overall
, among
men who were in the first group (15 to 24) had the highest Change preposition
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percentage
. However
, men who were in the third group (35 to 44) had the least percentage
. In the other gender, women, who were between 45 to 54 years old had the first rank, but women with
more than 65 years old had the least rank.
As we have six age Change preposition
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groups
, in male
gender about slightly over 50% of the youngest people, which were between 15 to 24 did workout regularly. The closest group to the youngest people were the oldest Correct article usage
the male
one
(more than 65) Correct pronoun usage
ones
did
regular Correct pronoun usage
who did
workout
. 46% of them did it. The Fix the agreement mistake
workouts
percentage
of other groups
which were between 25 to 64 did regular exercise was about 45%.
In the female gender, over 50% of three
Correct article usage
the three
groups
did physical activity which were
between 35 to 64. Change the verb form
was
However
, in other groups
virtually 47% of them did exercise which had a 6% gap Add a comma
,groups
with
comparison with the first three Change preposition
in
groups
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