The bar chart illustrates the percentage of a car factory's total sale in four continents (Asia, Europe, South America and Asia) annually during the five-year period from 2006 to 2010.

The bar chart illustrates the percentage of a car factory's total sale in four continents (Asia, Europe, South America and Asia)  annually during the five-year period from 2006 to 2010.
The given chart highlights information about the
whole sale
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wholesale
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of the percentage of
a
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the
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car industry yearly in four different continents, over a five-year period from 2006 to 2010.
Overall
, it can be seen that there were upward trends in all mentioned continents over the period in question with the exception of South America at which point it experienced a downward
trends
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trend
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. Looking at the details, the portion related to Asia started at 30% in 2006 and continued to
grew
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40
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at 40
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% in 2009 and
finally
, it hit a peak at 50% in the
last
year.
Following
this
, the percentage of Europe had almost alike ratio in the first and
last
years but it increased
over
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40% in 2008.
Conversely
, the company lost its fame in South America year by year in 2007 and 2008. it means the ratios were over 20%but
this
devastating condition continued until decreasing to 10% in 2010. Another striking point is that North America had the least eager nations and its proportion started at around 10% and fell to under one-tenth in the three following years and
finally
remained
in
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at
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30%.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 2 times.
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