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A restaurant has placed an advertisement for a manager in the local newspaper. Write a letter to the restaurant, applying for the job. In your letter: explain what you are currently doing describe your suitability for this job Tell them when you are free to attend an interview

Dear Sir/Madam, I would like to present myself for the post of manager in your Restaurant
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 is advertised in a local newspaper. I would really like to apply for
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 role. My name is Shan
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 I have pursued a post-graduation
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apply
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 in hotel management. I have been working as an assistant manager for seven years at a five-star hotel, managing clients/guests, the kitchen, and the events of the hotel. As I have already dealt with many guests and events
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it would
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 help me to deal with your restaurant sections. I would like to
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 the fact that
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 job would be inevitable for
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me,
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 as I would be gaining a lot of opportunities and experience. Dealing with huge customers and events pushes me to another level
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 my
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. If you are interested in my profile. I would like to attend the interview any time between 9am to 1pm so that it won’t
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 any distractions in my current job. Thank you for your consideration . Looking forward to hearing from you. Yours faithfully, XYZ.

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structure
Plan your letter with three clear parts: intro, body about work, body about fit, and a short line about when you can have interviews.
greeting
Keep the greeting and closing clear. Start with Dear Sir/Madam and end with Yours faithfully.
paragraphing
Try to use one idea in each paragraph. Put your current job in one paragraph, your fit for this role in another.
content
Give more detail on how you fit the job and what you did in past roles to show you can do this job.
grammar
Check word use and grammar. Some phrases are not right, like inevitable and carrier. Use simple and correct words.
tone
Polite tone in opening and closing.
content
Shows work experience and role.
content
Mentions all asked points (current work, fit, interview time).
Structure your letter

A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:

  • A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
  • The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
  • A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)

When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.

All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.

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