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The chart demonstrates percentage of international graduates in Canadian universities between 2001 and 2006.

#percentage #graduates #canadian #universities
The chart demonstrates
percentage
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the percentage
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 of international graduates in Canadian
universities
 between 2001 and 2006. In
generall
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general
, in 2006
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 more international students than in 2001 between Canadian
universities
 29. It's clear, that as the New Brunswick and Nova Scotia were in the TOP-3, so they remained here. Changed only the third place - from Quebec to British Columbia. If we compare the two years each other - whatever
universities
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 a positive progress. The biggest difference was in British Columbia from almost
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5% to
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roughly
 10%, in comparison as the smallest difference was in Ontario - from a tiny fraction to one in twenty.
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 between Manitoba
university
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University
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 and Newfoundland and Labrador
university
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 from less than 5 % to 5-10 %. Of course, Ontario and Alberta did
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 range,
however
, it's clear to see that Ontario had less progress in international graduates than
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university
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,
while
 Alberta had more students.
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 between 2001 and 2006 years increased
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 of international students.
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