The diagrams below show the stages and equipment used in the cement making process, and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purposes. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below show the stages and

equipment used in the cement making process,

and how cement is used to produce concrete for

building purposes.

Summarise the information by selecting and

reporting the main features, and make

comparisons where relevant.
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The diagram shows the process of making
cement
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and how
cemente
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cement
is used to produce concrete which is used for construction purposes.
Cement
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production
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consist
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consists
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of 5 stages in total and the raw material used is limestone and clay.
Meanwhile
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concrete
production
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require
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requires
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mixing
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the mixing
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of
cement
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with water, sand and gravel. In the
production
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of
cement
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initially
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limestone and clay is passed through crusher and powdered.
Then
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this
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powder is passed through
mixer
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a mixer
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and mixed properly.
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Subsequently
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the powder is passed through
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a roatating
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roatating
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rotating
heater, where heat is applied
on
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the materials passed through it. Later the powder substance is grinder well with the help of a grinder.
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Finally
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the
cement
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is produced and packed in bags for easy transportation and sale of product.
Whereas
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, the
production
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of concrete using
cement
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is
compartively
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comparatively
an easier process. For
this
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,
cement
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(15%), water (10%), Sand (25%), and gravel (50%)
is
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are
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combined together using huge
concreate
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concrete
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mixers which
roatates
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rotate
in speed. For quality concrete half of the mixture should consist of gravel, which are small stones with a ratio of quarter sand and
quater
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quarter
cement
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with water.
Overall
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, the
production
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of
cement
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is a long process,
whereas
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concreate
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concrete
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production
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is an easier method. Only a 15
perecentage
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percentage
of
this
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cement
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is used in the
production
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of
concreate
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concrete
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words cement, production with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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