Some people think that it is a good thing for senior management positions to have very high salaries compared to other workers of lower positions in the same company. To what extent do you agree?

It is argued that senior
employees
get well-paid salaries compared to other
workers
in the same company. I completely agree with
this
idea
becouse
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because
every worker should be paid a large
amount
of
money
to
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their own task. In
this
essay, I will discuss why
employees
who
work
in the same place earn different
amount
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amounts
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of
money
than others. The essay will be provided with relevant answers and examples. Nowadays, people
work
a variety of jobs in order to make
money
for their needs. Most of them try to get
much
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a lot of
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money
due to
living easily. First of all, they find jobs which are
good
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condition and well-paid. They know that
well experienced
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workers
get higher salaries than them.
Secondly
, some of the
employees
can disagree with
thes
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this
situation
although
they have a lack of experience.
Lastly
, after a few
years
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years,
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they can understand why
this
is.
For example
, many years ago, a young guy was employed at
school
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a school
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in our neighborhood. After
then
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that
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he complained about his salary
nevertheless
he did not manage to teach pupils.
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he was able to understand his faults so as to be lack of experience.
In other words
,
well experienced
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workers
should be paid better than others. They know how to deal with their tasks. Because every worker has their own
work
although
they
work
in the same company. Boss of the companies know how to pay
money
.
For instance
, we have a factory that produces textiles in our country. There are different types of
employees
work
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who work
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there. They are paid a variety
amount
of
money
that
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and
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they do their own tasks.
Firstly
no one complains about their salary.
Secondly
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they know why they get different
amount
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amounts
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of
money
. In conclusion, some people believe that senior
workers
should be paid better than a lack of
experience
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workers
. I agree with
this
idea because
well experienced
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people ought to get higher
salary
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salaries
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than others. I have tried to
anwer
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answer
correctly and
provid
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provide
relevant examples in
this
essay.
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Task Response
Address the task more directly by discussing the reasons for and against senior management high salaries, providing clear examples and relevant details. Make sure to present a well-structured introduction and conclusion.
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