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Some people think that it is a good thing for senior management positions to have very high salaries compared to other workers of lower positions in the same company. To what extent do you agree?

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It is argued that senior
employees
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 get well-paid salaries compared to other
workers
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 in the same company. I completely agree with
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 idea
becouse
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because
 every worker should be paid a large
amount
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 of
money
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to
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for
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 their own task. In
this
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employees
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 who
work
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 in the same place earn different
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amount
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amounts
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 of
money
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 than others. The essay will be provided with relevant answers and examples. Nowadays, people
work
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 a variety of jobs in order to make
money
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 for their needs. Most of them try to get
much
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money
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due to
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 living easily. First of all, they find jobs which are
good
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in good
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 condition and well-paid. They know that
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workers
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 get higher salaries than them.
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, some of the
employees
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 can disagree with
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this
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 they have a lack of experience.
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, after a few
years
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years,
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 they can understand why
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, many years ago, a young guy was employed at
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a school
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 in our neighborhood. After
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then
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 he complained about his salary
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 he did not manage to teach pupils.
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Finally
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 he was able to understand his faults so as to be lack of experience.
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,
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workers
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 should be paid better than others. They know how to deal with their tasks. Because every worker has their own
work
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although
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 they
work
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 in the same company. Boss of the companies know how to pay
money
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.
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, we have a factory that produces textiles in our country. There are different types of
employees
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work
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 there. They are paid a variety
amount
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 of
money
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that
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and
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 they do their own tasks.
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 no one complains about their salary.
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Secondly
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Secondly,
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 they know why they get different
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amount
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amounts
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 of
money
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. In conclusion, some people believe that senior
workers
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 should be paid better than a lack of
experience
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experienced
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workers
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. I agree with
this
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 idea because
well experienced
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well-experienced
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 people ought to get higher
salary
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salaries
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 than others. I have tried to
anwer
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answer
 correctly and
provid
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provide
 relevant examples in
this
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 essay.
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Task Response
Address the task more directly by discussing the reasons for and against senior management high salaries, providing clear examples and relevant details. Make sure to present a well-structured introduction and conclusion.
Coherence and Cohesion
Improve the logical structure of the essay by organizing ideas more coherently. Connect sentences and paragraphs to ensure a clear flow of ideas. Provide a more conclusive introduction and conclusion to effectively summarize the main points of the essay.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Senior management
  • Salary disparity
  • Incentives
  • Income inequality
  • Organizational culture
  • Career progression
  • Employee morale
  • Compensation
  • Financial success
  • Decision-making
  • Responsibility
  • Merit
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