the graph shows the amount earned by graduates of different age groups in 2002. It includes those with a degree, those with a higher degree (postgraduate) and those with other qualifications. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

the graph shows the amount earned by graduates of different age groups in 2002. It includes those with a degree, those with a higher degree (postgraduate) and those with other qualifications. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
According to
the diagram, there are obvious differences in the salaries of the different levels of educational employees.
Firstly
, all the weekly earnings are increased in the first two decades after graduation. The highest
salary
of them was over 800 per week at around 38 years old, and it came from the postgraduates. The graph showed the higher degree would have higher earnings at the very beginning.
For example
. the newly graduated higher degree indicates got 410 per week, but the diploma might have 350 a week.
In contrast
, the
salary
of postgraduates and first degree indicates would become the same, which is around 700, before they retire.
On the other hand
, the medium-degree person, who had other qualifications, had the highest
salary
before 60 years old. The weekly earnings increased from around 700 to 800 in the
last
decade of their working period. In summary, a higher level of education would bring people a higher
salary
at the beginning.
However
, how the
salary
shift in the future, it's quite independent.
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