The pie charts compare the amount of online shopping sales for the retail sector in New Zealand in 2003 and 2013. Moreover, these sales are divided into four categories: travel, film/ music, book, and clothes.

The pie charts compare the amount of online shopping sales for the retail sector in New Zealand in 2003 and 2013. Moreover, these sales are divided into four categories: travel, film/ music, book, and clothes.
The pie charts compare the number of online shopping
sales
for the retail sector in New Zealand in 2003 and 2013.
Moreover
, these
sales
are divided into four categories:
travel
,
film
/
music
, book, and clothes.
Overall
, it can be clearly observed that
although
the sale of
travel
accounted for the largest proportion in 2003, 10 years later it was replaced by
film
and
music
sales
. Starting with 2003, the
sales
of the
travel
sector accounted for the highest percentage, at 36%, followed by clothes at 24%, and
film
/
music
at 21%, respectively.
In contrast
, books were the worst-selling category, seeing that they only made up 19% of all
sales
. In 2013, the sale of
film
and
music
experienced a considerable increase to 33%, replacing that of
travel
, which slightly declined to 29% from 36%.
Finally
, it is interesting to note that
although
books were the worst-selling category in 2003, there were replaced by clothing whose
sales
dropped significantly from 24% and 16%, making it the category with the smallest
sales
in 2013.
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