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The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories, from 1995-2002. Summarise the information by selecting a reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories, from 1995-2002. Summarise the information by selecting a reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The graph shows the phone calls by billions of
minuts
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minutes
 mobiles in the United Kingdom between 1995 and 2002, separated by three calling categories: national and international, local and mobile. The main results
shows
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show
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 an
exponencial
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exponential
increase
 in mobile calls, a linear
increase
 in national and international calls, and
a
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an
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increase
 and
then
decrease
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a decrease
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of
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in
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 local calls. Local calls have the most call
minuts
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minutes
 during the time,
however
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,however
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 the distance
with
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between
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 national and phone calls has been
reducing
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reduced
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. Local calls were 72
billions
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billion
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minutes
 in 1995, reached the maximum in 1999 with 90
billion
minutes
 and
then
 it was reduced to 72
billions
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billion
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 again in 2002. Regarding national and international calls, it shows
an
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a
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 constant
increase
, from 38
billion
minutes
 in 1995 to 58
billion
minutes
 in 2002.
Finally
, mobiles call had the most important
increasing
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increase
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, starting from 3
billion
minutes
 in 1995 to 45
billion
 calls in 2002
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words increase, minutes, billion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • total number of minutes
  • telephone calls
  • categories
  • local – fixed line
  • national and international – fixed line
  • mobiles
  • general trend
  • yearly totals
  • significant changes
  • milestones
  • data
  • rise significantly
  • decline
  • steady increase
  • fluctuate
  • peak
  • exponential growth
  • over the period
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