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the graph below shows the populations in india and china since the year of 2000and predicts populations growth untill 2050.

the graph below shows the populations in india and china since the year of 2000and predicts populations growth untill 2050.
#populations #india #china #year #growth #untill
This
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illustrautes
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illustrates
 the population ( in billions )
for
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 both
India
 and
China
, since the
year
 2000 and up to the
year
 2050 predictions.
Overall
,
this
 is a constant increase in population in
India
 from the
year
 2000 up to the
year
 2050,
while
 in
China
 the increase in
poplulation
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population
 slows down and
then
 it is expected to decrease by 2050. In the
year
 2000,
China
's
poplulation
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population
 was much higher than
India
's, at 1.250 (
billion
) compared to
Indian
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India
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 which was
a
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1000 (
billion
 ) only. Both
contries
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countries
 started to have more and more people living there
,
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 until it was estimated that both had an
excat
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exact
 1,400 (
billion
) living in
year
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the year
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 2030.
Although
China
 had a higher population in
year
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the year
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 2000, it is expected that
it's
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its
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popluation
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population
 will reduce and will reach less than 1400 (
billion
 )
in
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year
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 2050.
On the other hand
,
India
 will continue to have more births of a
maximium
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maximum
 of more than 1,550 (
billion
 ) in
year
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the year
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 2050.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words india, china, year, billion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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