the pie charts below shop the online shopping sales for retail sectors in New Zealand in 2003 and 2013 summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

the pie charts below shop the online shopping sales for retail sectors in New Zealand in 2003 and 2013 summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
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The charts provide information about the percentage of online sales in four different categories of retail sales in New Zealand in 2003 and 2013.
Overall
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, there is no category that did not change.
To begin
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with, in 2003 travel contributed the highest number of sales 36 per cent,
whereas
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in 2013 film and music value is highest
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per cent. The second highest value in 2003
clothes
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27 %,
while
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in 2013 the second highest is travel 29 %. In 2003 in the middle of the top clothes are located they contributed 21 % ,
nevertheless
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in ,2013 the lowest number of trades take clothes 16 %. And in 2013 books are the third most popular among four different services. In conclusion, the preferences of people changed over ten years and most of the money in 2013 was spent to buy film and music,
while
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in 2003 most of the money was spent on travel.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • retail sectors
  • online shopping sales
  • percentage increase/decrease
  • significant growth/decline
  • electronic goods
  • clothing and footwear
  • food and beverages
  • household goods
  • recreational goods
  • stable sales
  • emerging sectors
  • overall growth
  • decade comparison
  • shift in consumer behavior
  • e-commerce
  • trend analysis
  • market dynamics
  • purchasing habits
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