You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The pie charts below show the percentage of time working adults spent on different activities in a particular country in 1958 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant You should write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The pie charts below show the percentage of time working adults spent on different activities in a particular country in 1958 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

You should write at least 150 words.
Information is presented in two pie charts which compare the amount of
time
, in percentage, that employees spent on six different activities in a country between 1958 and 2008.
Overall
, it can be clearly seen that
while
each
activity
that working adults did
experienced
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a wide variety of changes, working and sleeping were the most and the second most popular categories in both years respectively.
In addition
, the most significant change in employees’
behavior
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was travelling to work. Turning to
first
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the first
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main feature, working ranked first in
activity
that working adults spent their
time
on over the survey period, contributing to 33% in 1958 and 42% in 2008.
Next,
sleeping ranked second in the
activity
that employees did. In 1958 the amount of
time
that employees slept was
an
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exact
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32%, before decreasing slightly to a precise 25% in 2008. Turning to another main feature, with respect to going out, the popularity of
this
activity
decreased noticeably from a modest 19% in 1958 to only 6% in 2008.
Nevertheless
, there was
also
an increase of 5% in relaxing at home. In 1958 only 8% of working adults spent their
time
on
this
activity
. After
that
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the popularity of
this
activity
rose to a modest 13% in 2008. The
last
key point to note is travelling to work which rose fourfold from a precise 2% in 1958 to an exact 8% in 2008.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words time, activity with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "modest" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • pie chart
  • percentage
  • activities
  • working adults
  • summarise
  • report
  • main features
  • comparisons
  • relevant
  • time spent
  • work-related
  • leisure
  • personal care
  • travel
  • noticeable trends
  • over a period
  • devoted
  • significant changes
  • contrast
  • compare
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