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The pie charts below the comparison of different kinds of energy production of France in two years.

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The presented pie charts delineated data about the collation of various types of
energy
production
of
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 France between 1995 and 2005.Units are measured in percentage. At
the
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first glance, the most considerable resource of
energy
were
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Gas
 and coal
accounted
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accounting
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 for over half of
production
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while
 they stood at the highest point in 2005 too. Looking at the graph in more
details
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.In 1995
gas
 and coal stood at
approximently
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approximately
 less than a third
whereas
 Nuclear and others owned
the
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6.40% and 4.90% of
energy
production
.Petrol had
the
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29.27%of
energy
 in comparison to in 2005 petrol which per cent declined
roughtly
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roughly
 19.55%.In 2005
gas
 and coal
which
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together increased
about
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 31% .So nuclear and other
rised
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rose
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 from one in twenty
from
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 one in ten .
Overall
 , over the given periods
Gas
 and coal reached the highest point .And other kinds of
energy
production
 experienced
slightly
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 increased too.Petrol was the only material of
energy
 which dipped in
production
 from 29.27% in 1995 to around a fifth in 2005.
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