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Average percentages of sodium,saturated fats and added sugars in typical meals consumed in the USA

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The pie charts provide information about three unhealthy ingredients and their proportions in daily
meals
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.
overall
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, it is obvious that the highest dishes with sodium and saturated fat percentages were served at dinner . Interestingly,
sugar
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 was mainly involved in
snacks
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. As we see , sodium is mostly involved in dinner with a percentage reaching 43% .
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, Sodium was added to luch in 29% and to breakfast and
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 in only 14% The second material was saturated fat ,
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, it affects the health terribly as researchers discovered.
The saturated
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 fat was used in all
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 and
snacks
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 with 37% in dinners and 26 % in lunches and 21% in
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 only 16% of saturated fat
involved
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 in breakfast.
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, added
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was considered by many doctors as the major cause of obesity. The
sugar
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 mainly was found in
snacks
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 regularly eaten between
meals
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.dinner came right after in
sugar
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 ratio with only 23% .
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 lunch and breakfast came at the bottom in order. In conclusion, the vast majority of Americans'
meals
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 contain a lot of unhealthy materials which could negatively impact their health.
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