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The pie charts show the comparison of different kind of energy consumption of the UK in two years.

The pie charts show the comparison of different kind of energy consumption of the UK in two years.
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The given pie charts demonstrate the contrast of
proportion
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the proportion
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 of different
energy
 sources
of
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in
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 the UK between 1995 and 2005.
Overall
, the
consumption
 of coal had the highest ratio for each year, and other unsignificant resources had the lowest
proportion
 than major fuels
such
 as coal, petrol, gas and nuclear power. In 1995, the UK's
energy
 sources of coal, gas and petrol had quite similar
proportion
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proportions
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 which was approximately
one third
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one-third
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 of
consumption
.
Moreover
, coal
consumption
 took the highest ratio which was 29.80%. Nuclear and other
energy
 methods,
in contrast
, had smaller ratios than the major fuels
such
 as 6.40% and 4.90% respectively. After the period of 10 years, coal and gas
consumption
 inclined relatively, but petrol
consumption
 declined by roughly 10 per cent.
Therefore
, coal
energy
 provided the highest
proportion
 with 30.93%. Nuclear power approximately increased by 4 per cent and reached
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10.10%. Undefined sources rather than the major
energy
 providers nearly doubled
its
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their
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proportion
 and took 9.10% of
energy
 production of the UK in 2005.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words proportion, energy, consumption with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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