The pie charts show the comparison of different kind of energy consumption of the UK in two years.

The pie charts show the comparison of different kind of energy consumption of the UK in two years.
The given pie charts demonstrate the contrast of
proportion
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the proportion
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of different
energy
sources
of
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in
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the UK between 1995 and 2005.
Overall
, the
consumption
of coal had the highest ratio for each year, and other unsignificant resources had the lowest
proportion
than major fuels
such
as coal, petrol, gas and nuclear power. In 1995, the UK's
energy
sources of coal, gas and petrol had quite similar
proportion
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proportions
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which was approximately
one third
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one-third
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of
consumption
.
Moreover
, coal
consumption
took the highest ratio which was 29.80%. Nuclear and other
energy
methods,
in contrast
, had smaller ratios than the major fuels
such
as 6.40% and 4.90% respectively. After the period of 10 years, coal and gas
consumption
inclined relatively, but petrol
consumption
declined by roughly 10 per cent.
Therefore
, coal
energy
provided the highest
proportion
with 30.93%. Nuclear power approximately increased by 4 per cent and reached
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10.10%. Undefined sources rather than the major
energy
providers nearly doubled
its
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proportion
and took 9.10% of
energy
production of the UK in 2005.
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