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The table below shows the proportion of different categories of families living in poverty in Australia in 1999. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the proportion of different categories of families living in poverty in Australia in 1999. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table displays the rates of how many families of different categories lived in poverty in 1999 in Australia.
Overall
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, the family type which had the major rate was sole parents,
while
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 the lowest rate could be found in single-aged
people
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. Beginning with the highest proportions, it can be seen that
sole
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 parents were the most numerous category, followed by single
people
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 without
children
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 and
couples
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 with
children
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.
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, the highest rate was 21% of the population, representing 933,000
people
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,
whereas
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 the lowest proportion was aged
couples
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 with only 4% of the population, representing 48,000
people
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.
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, other relevant comparisons are
that sole parents
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that sole parent
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 tripled
couples
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 without
children
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, with 933,000 and 211,000, respectively, and at the same time,
couples
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 with
children
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 doubled single-aged
people
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, with 232,000 and 54,000, respectively.
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, it is
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 worth noting that the total of all households was 1,837,000
people
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, which represents 11% of the Australian population.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, children, couples with synonyms.
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