The charts show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010

The charts show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010
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The pie charts illustrate information about the percentage of students at one university in the UK who are bilingual or speak more than
two
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languages
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extra than English in the years 2000 and 2010.
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, a glance at the charts can reveal most of the students tend to learn Spanish as their second
language
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in
two
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different years. Only a few numbers of them like to continue
German
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language
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. In 2000, 10% of British students were able to speak German and
two
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other
languages
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by their choice.
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proportion increased by 5% in French and
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other languages
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language
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30% of the learner could speak Spanish and 20% of them were not able to speak any
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extra than English. In 2010, 35% and 20% of the British pupil were bilingual and spoke Spanish and another
language
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respectively. 15% spoke
two
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other
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and only 10 per cent of them spoke French< German and no other
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except English.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportions
  • British students
  • university
  • speaking other languages
  • language proficiency
  • overall trends
  • comparison
  • 2000
  • 2010
  • chart
  • data
  • percentage
  • significant
  • increase
  • decrease
  • noteworthy
  • comparative analysis
  • improvement
  • decline
  • conclusion
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