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When choosing a job, the salary is the most important consideration. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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When deciding
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job
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,
salary
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 is the first thing to consider. Personally, I agree with
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 statement but in my
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 other factors
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 as working environment and
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 satisfaction should be taken the same consideration as well
,
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 when making a
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desicions
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decisions
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. On the one hand, there are various benefits why people consider
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the size of the
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 offered.
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, it is essential to keep up with basic expenses and lifestyle. And
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 helpful for unexpected cost as illness costs, hospital bills and so forth... Plus, it is better to establish good financial background.
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, living keeps increasing year after year and it is leading
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 to feel financial stress. Everything from education and healthcare to food and housing has become expensive. If people are paid well, they will feel that the company appreciates their contribution. Even a good
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 raises a person's self and social image.
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, I believe that other factors are among the most important features when choosing a career.
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, the working environment should be taken into account. A good working place may include entrainment objects, colleagues,
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. In that atmosphere,
employee
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employees
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 could easily increase self-development and productivity by communicating with other workers.
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,
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 satisfaction
another
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 essential aspect
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 be considered. When it comes to choosing a
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, a person who wants to earn a big
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 has to enjoy
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while
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working in a company.
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, the work hours should be reasonable, the working station should pay well
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. Employees are human beings like anyone else. In my perspective, a
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 that pays a bit less but offers satisfactory
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working conditions is a much better idea.
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,
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 size of the
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 plays a huge role when picking a
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 but other factors in combination have more vital benefits and have more significance than the money.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consideration
  • sole factor
  • financial stability
  • security
  • motivating factor
  • dissatisfaction
  • demotivation
  • job satisfaction
  • overall well-being
  • fulfillment
  • work-life balance
  • flexible working hours
  • vacations
  • career growth opportunities
  • skill development
  • advancement
  • determining factor
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