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The bar graph represents the export of 5 distinct products by a nation, while the table illustrates the change witnessed in the values in 2015 and 2016.\ Overall, it is clear that the maximum export was of petroleum, while it was minimum for textiles. On the other hand, the value of all products increased over the time except gems and jewellery. To begin with the bar graph, in 2015, the maximum export was of petroleum products, which was nearly 61 billion dollars, followed by engineered goods at roughly 57 billion dollars. However, the least was of agricultural products and textiles, reported below 30 billion dollars. The figures for gems and jewellery was almost 42 billions dollars Over the year, the export inclined minutely for petroleum products and engineered by crossing 80 billions dollars, similarly a hike was noticed for textiles which reached to approximately 30 billion dollars. In contrast, the export fell down for gems and jewellery at exact 40 billion dollars. No change was seen for the agricultural products. In case of table, the value for textiles and engineered goods upsurged dramatically to 15.24% and 8.5%. Likewise, it went up gradually for petroleum products at 3% and agricultural products at 0.81%. Interestingly, the proportion dropped at 5.18% for gem and jewellery.

The bar graph represents the export of 5 distinct products by a nation, while the table illustrates the change witnessed in the values in 2015 and 2016.\ Overall, it is clear that the maximum export was of petroleum, while it was minimum for textiles. On the other hand, the value of all products increased over the time except gems and jewellery. To begin with the bar graph, in 2015, the maximum export was of petroleum products, which was nearly 61 billion dollars, followed by engineered goods at roughly 57 billion dollars. However, the least was of agricultural products and textiles, reported below 30 billion dollars. The figures for gems and jewellery was almost 42 billions dollars Over the year, the export inclined minutely for petroleum products and engineered by crossing 80 billions dollars, similarly a hike was noticed for textiles which reached to approximately 30 billion dollars. In contrast, the export fell down for gems and jewellery at exact 40 billion dollars. No change was seen for the agricultural products. In case of table, the value for textiles and engineered goods upsurged dramatically to 15.24% and 8.5%. Likewise, it went up gradually for petroleum products at 3% and agricultural products at 0.81%. Interestingly, the proportion dropped at 5.18% for gem and jewellery.
The bar graph represents the
export
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 of 5 distinct
products
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 by a nation,
while
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 the table illustrates the change witnessed in the values in 2015 and 2016.\
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the maximum
export
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 was
petroleum
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,
while
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 it was the minimum for
textiles
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.
On the other hand
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, the value of all
products
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 increased over time except gems and
jewellery
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.
To begin
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 with the bar graph, in 2015, the maximum
export
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 was
petroleum
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products
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, which was nearly 61
billion
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dollars
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, followed by engineered goods at roughly 57
billion
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dollars
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.
However
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, the least was for agricultural
products
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 and
textiles
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, reported below 30
billion
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dollars
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. The figures for gems and
jewellery
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 was almost 42
billion
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dollars
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 Over the year, the
export
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 inclined minutely for
petroleum
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products
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 and engineered by crossing 80
billion
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dollars
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,
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similarly
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 a hike was noticed for
textiles
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 which reached approximately 30
billion
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dollars
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.
In contrast
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, the
export
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 fell down for gems and
jewellery
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 at exactly 40
billion
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dollars
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. No change was seen in the agricultural
products
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. In the case of the table, the value of
textiles
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 and engineered goods upsurged dramatically to 15.24% and 8.5%.
Likewise
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, it went up gradually for
petroleum
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products
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 at 3% and for agricultural
products
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 to 0.81%. Interestingly, the proportion dropped to 5.18% for gem and
jewellery
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words export, products, petroleum, textiles, jewellery, billion, dollars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "represents" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "change" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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