The graph below shows the average daily spend of three categories of international visitor to New Zealand from 1997 to 2017. Summarise it.

The graph below shows the average daily spend of three categories of international visitor to New Zealand from 1997 to 2017. Summarise it.
This
chart depicts the mean value in daily expenditure by tourists to New Zealand, spanning two decades, from 1997 to 2017. The line graph is
further
divided to show the different
categories
of visitors, from those travelling for
business
, for leisure or for visiting friends and relatives. The trend is similar for all three
categories
- there is a general increase seen
initially
from 1997-2003, which
then
drops and remains steady until 2017. There are, of course, fluctuations seen, but the general trend seems to plateau. Between 1997 and 2003, there is a distinct difference between the groups with the most
expense
carried out by those in New Zealand on
business
, whilst the least is the group visiting family. After 2003, there is a sharp decrease in
business
expense
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until it stabilises with the group there on holiday.
However
, there is no overlap seen with the category visiting friends as that group is continuously spending less. Those there on
business
inititally
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initially
spend around $300 per
day
, but after 2003
this
dropped to around $200 per
day
- a decrease of $100 per
day
.
Similarly
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the expenditure of the other two
categories
also
dropped, but not to the extent of the
business
travellers. The tourists spent around $40 less per
day
and those there
visitng
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visiting
family spent approximately $60 less per
day
. Interestingly, the only category to have dropped below the
expense
recorded in 1997 is the people who travelled to New Zealand on
business
- the other two groups remained consistent with their 1997
expense
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.
Overall
there is a decrease in all three
categories
after 2003, which may have been
due to
less travelling which means less
expense
; or maybe
due to
an inflation in price from 1997 to 2003.
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