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The graph below shows the population of India and China from the year 2000 to the present day with projections for growth to the year 2050.

The graph below shows the population of India and China from the year 2000 to the present day with projections for growth to the year 2050.
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This
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 line graph illustrates the inhabitants of India and China between 2000 and today with
predication
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 for development till
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years
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the years
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 of 2050.
overall
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, It is significant to note that the two. countries experienced a drastic increase,and
this
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 will continue in the future In India, the number of people
surge
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 as the
years
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 went and it is expected to reach almost 1,6 Billion by 2050.
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 , in 2000 the figure was the lowest, five
years
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 later the numbers increased gradually to 1.1 billion in the population.
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, the
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given period
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 a steady rise as the
years
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 went and they
are
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 relatively uniform between 1.1 to 1.5 respectively. ‏An opposite pattern can be seen In
china
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China
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, in 2005 the population recorded at ‏1.3
Billions
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.
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,The highest number will be
in observe
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 in 2030 pushing the figure to the peak of under 1.5 people. ‏
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, in 2030 both ‏countries
estimate
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 ‏to be identical . After ,that the population project going to ‏fall
steady
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 ‏to reach only 1.4 Billion .
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Vocabulary: Replace the words years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
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