The graph below shows the population of India and China from the year 2000 to the present day with projections for growth to the year 2050.

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line graph illustrates the inhabitants of India and China between 2000 and today with

predication

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for development till

years

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the years

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of 2050.

overall

, It is significant to note that the two. countries experienced a drastic increase,and

this

will continue in the future In India, the number of people

surge

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as the

years

went and it is expected to reach almost 1,6 Billion by 2050.

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, in 2000 the figure was the lowest, five

years

later the numbers increased gradually to 1.1 billion in the population.

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given period

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a steady rise as the

years

went and they

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relatively uniform between 1.1 to 1.5 respectively. ‏An opposite pattern can be seen In

china

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China

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, in 2005 the population recorded at ‏1.3

Billions

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Furthermore

,The highest number will be

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in 2030 pushing the figure to the peak of under 1.5 people. ‏

However

, in 2030 both ‏countries

estimate

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‏to be identical . After ,that the population project going to ‏fall

steady

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‏to reach only 1.4 Billion .

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The graph below shows the population of India and China from the year 2000 to the present day with projections for growth to the year 2050.

You should write informal letter to your friend.

Some people say that to prevent illness and disease, governments should focus more on reducing environmental pollution and housing problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people say that economic development is necessary to reduce the poverty in the world. Others say that economic growth should be stopped immediately lo stop damaging the environment. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

In the future, people may no longer be able to pay for things in shops using cash. All payments may have to be made by card or using phones. Do you think this will happen one day? Why do you think some people might not be happy to give up using cash?

In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this the case? What can be done about this problem?