The chart below shows the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The chart below shows the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
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The bar chart and table represent the income generated from the exportation of products and the percentage of increase in
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respective years 2015 and 2016. Fuel contributed to 60 billion dollars previously,over the next year a slight increase to 65 is observed.A similar trend is seen in the case of engineered goods and textiles from 55 to 62 and 25 to 32 respectively.
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from 43 to 40 dollars. There
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a mere fluctuation in machinery required for plant growth, 30 billion dollars in both the annual years. The materials related to farming, petrol,engineering and textiles have gained popularity in foreign countries as sales raised by 0.81 3, 8.5 and 15.24 respectively in ascending order .
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the contrary, the popularity of gems and jewellery reduced by 5.18 per cent.
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,commercial growth is observed in diesel,goods for building,farming equipment and clothing with the highest being in textiles.
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a downhill is observed in ornaments.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reduced" was used 2 times.
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