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the pie charts below show the comparison of different kinds of energy production of France in two years

the pie charts below show the comparison of different kinds of energy production of France in two years
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The given pie charts compare the different types of energy
production
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 in France from the year 1995 to 2005.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 almost all of the energy
production
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 (Coal, Gas, Nuclear, Other) increased except Petro, which was dominated by Coal. Regarding the comparison of fossil fuels (Coal, Gas, Petro)
production
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. In the first
year
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 the
production
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 of Coal was 29.80% and it showed a slight rise in 2005 to 30.93% and became the largest energy
production
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 in France.
In addition
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, the second rank was Gas that accounted for less than a third in 1995 and increased to 30.93 % in 2005,
whereas
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 the different trend of the source was Petro which fell in
production
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 from 29.27% in 1995 to around a fifth (19.95%) in 2005. Turning to the
production
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 of Nuclear and Other sources. Looking at the pictures, approximately 5% growth in the
production
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 of both Nuclear and Other sources.
Following
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this
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, Nuclear
production
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 increased from 6.40% to 10.10% in 2005, and with almost similar trend the
production
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 of Other sources rose from 4.90% to 9.10% in 2005.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words production with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Nuclear energy
  • Renewable energy
  • Non-renewable energy
  • Technological advancements
  • Government policy
  • Environmental policies
  • Investment in renewable technologies
  • Traditional energy sources
  • Coal usage
  • Natural gas
  • Environmental regulations
  • Energy consumption
  • Energy production levels
  • Proportion
  • Broader trends
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